have you ever experienced lake effect snow I sure have since I've lived in Michigan all my life I'm Mrs def fall and I love our Great Lake State even the snow usually but what is Lake Effect anyway lake effect snow is created when cold air blows over warm water as the Great Lake State we often experience lake effect snow because of the five Great Lakes which also means we usually experience a few extra snow days for this lesson we will listen to a read aloud about a snow day and then respond to that read aloud making connections to our lives we are also going to think about how to add in more dialogue to make our stories come alive the spoken words are the dialogue whenever a character speaks we see quotation marks around words which tells us when dialogue is taking place I think of this as a smiley face with dimple whatever is spoken is framed with quotation marks slippery snow day surprise late for school one morning Jade raced for the door hurry EMT EMT zipped around the corner scrambling to pull on his warm hat and gloves I'm right behind you the cold Michigan's winter wind whipped all around them as they trudged to the bus stop their Footprints following them in the snow the headlight beams from different vehicles creeped along the dark slippery Road I can't believe we have school today EMT said tucking his chin into his coat Jade's teeth chattered so much she couldn't respond with words she opened her eyes wide to show EMT she agreed in the distance they saw the school bus inching along the road as the bus tried to stop in front of them its yellow lights turning to Red the bus slipped right past them oh no Jade said what do we do just then the school bus driver opened the door Jade and EMT tried to step toward the bus but stopped when they heard the school bus driver shout go back home no school today they just called it Jade and EMT stood there for a moment like frozen snow statues their eyes filled with surprise and they yelled snow day I wonder what the story made you think about is is there a special snowy memory that means so much to you I'm going to model for you how this story makes me think about a special snow day with my family today I'm using my computer to write the words feel free to use pencil and paper instead if that works better for you for me this story reminds me of my three children and our most recent snow day I love remembering what they said in the moment so I plan on adding a lot of dialogue just like in the story rad in my story whenever a character speaks I am going to put those words in quotation marks when the phone ring I recognized the School District's phone number immediately I turned on the speaker so Drew could hear the message too a snow day Drew squeal go tell your sisters I said with a smile Drew raced up the stairs like a mountain goat every step loud and thundering as he yelled Delaney Diana stop getting ready as I walked into the girls' bedroom snow day Smiles plastered their faces which match mine and Drew's perfectly now it's your turn I invite you and anyone you're with to write a memory that connects to weather related experiences what was said during your special memory if you can't remember exactly what was said that's perfectly okay writers are really good at inventing details when we choose to write we need to see ourselves as not only writers but rewriters think of it like a Snowman when we write the first draft it's adding the beginning middle and end like the bottom middle and top parts of a Snowman when we rewrite we add extra details to make our writing come to life much like carrot noses sticks for arms a hat and scarf for extra details added to bring a snowman to life I want to highlight a writing trick that helps me add action to to my dialogue the trick is a tiny word as in my writing I share dialogue and then couple it with as to add action this little trick helps me to add character action to my story so the reader can better visualize what's happening let me show you when the phone rang I recognized the School District's phone number immediately I turned on the speaker so Drew could hear the message too a snow day Drew squealed this is my first bit of dialogue I like my word choice squealed shows how Drew said a snow day let's use as to add another detail I'm picturing what Drew is doing a snow day Drew squealed as he jumped up and down now you try one in my story I wrote go tell your sisters I said with a smile how could I revise this to add an action What would you put in the blank go tell your sisters I said with a smile as I raced Drew up the stairs as I gave jur a win as the snow billowed outside the window great ideas everyone now take a look at your own writing find a bit of dialogue in your writing and add as to show some action when you're done reread your writing aloud to yourself how does it sound will the extra details help the reader better create images of what's happening in your writing I think so now that you've written and Rewritten a special memory that connects with this story please read aloud your writing to others authors love an audience